Friday, November 26, 2010

Manchester Poem.03.11.2010.

The sun and I are glancing off

your High-walls to heaven:

your dear glazed bricks, your

fast iron, cast-iron studs,

your gushing locks.

Monumentally

you soared in 1895

with a mind for Arts and Crafts,

Ars Laboris. Kept on soaring.

Rose from the Irwell

who still murmers black below.

We see her over the plated,

rivetted bridges,

a creature disturbed and disturbing,

glimpse the private lady

at her toilet.

Speaking of toilets

Manchester's oldest Pissotiere,

where gentlemen

publicly emptied their bladders

into Lady Irwell

is next to Joshua Brookes

and just before

The Lass O'Blairgowrie.



But it's glass and chrome,

reclaimed brick,

factories

of the mental kind

that are soaring these days.

It's monumental MMU

with its hard-faced,

glass-faced

commerce.

Sunday, November 21, 2010

Latest Barbie doll haiku 01.11.2010

The latest Barbie Doll (£59.99)contains a small video camera, concealed in her necklace. She also has a viewfinder in her back.
Other christmas 'stocking fillers' include the 'Fur Real My Go Go Walking Pup'(£59.99) , 'Zhu Zhu Hamsters with grooming salon', JLS dolls etc.

If Ken's been playing
away, Barbie's surveillance
camera will know.

Review of Edward Thomas's 'As the Team's Head Brass.'

'As The Team's Head Brass' by Edward Thomas. Review for 27-Oct -2nd Nov 2010. Poetry workshop Weeks 5- 6.




I originally reviewed 'The Lift' by Seamus Heaney and decided to select another one.



The mise-en scene is exquisite. The poet narrator, Thomas, is painting himself in.

The first six lines have sketched in all the actors, the stage and the unfolding action; so we have the head-brass(or lead-horse), its brasses glinting as it turns at the end of a ploughed furrow. We have the team and plough, the fallen elm tree on whose trunk the narrator is able to sit and watch the scene and the glimpse he catches of the lovers disappearing into a wood (taking their pleasure, grasping the moment or being part of the unfolding of happenstance, of fate). We have the ploughman himself intent on narrowing the square of charlock, of harrowing or ploughing the field ready for sowing. The backdrop as well as the blank verse allows the conversation that unfolds between the ploughman and the narrator to serve, it seems to me, as a kind of discussion on determinism and free will, on the necessity or otherwise of war, of serving wars, of the First World War in which Thomas himself served as an officer.

The poem as a whole is an exploration in a kind of philosophy. Existentialism comes to mind in the sense of a philosophy which emphasizes freedom of choice and personal and moral responsibility but which regards human existence in a hostile universe as unexplainable, without its own raison d'etre.

In this light we have the discussion of fate, of what will be, set against what is chosen, how we plough our own furrow, plough the furrows of others, narrow down the field, choose one path against another, how we are expected to abandon our own moral imperatives, how serving a war is an imperative. It's possible to see many questions in a reading of the poem. In any case, the narrator serves as a kind of devil's advocate in the dialogue.

Ploughman "Have you been out?"

Narrator" No".

"And don't want to, perhaps?"

"If I could only come back again, I should.

I could spare an arm. I shouldn't want to lose

A leg. If I should lose my head, why, so

I should want nothing more...Have many gone

From here?" "Yes" "Many lost?" "Yes, a good few.

Only two teams work on the farm this year.

One of my mates is dead...now if he had stayed here

we should have moved that tree."

"And I should not have sat here.. Everything would have been different

For it would have been another world.""Ay,

and a better, though if we could see all, all might seem good."

Were we able to predict the future we should live our lives accordingly, prevent war or each other from fighting someone else's wars. This is counterpointed by the sobering thought that fate is dealt, that it comes hurtling or creeping towards us or perhaps is turned over by the farrow or plough. All roads taken,as Frost would have it, mean other roads not taken, elms not sat on or sat on, conversations and the observable delights of a team ploughing taking place. Thomas seems to evoke by contrast the 'what is to be' by acts, actors and the things acted upon,. The plough, the team, the man narrowing the field of charlock, the lovers going into and out of the wood all remind us that the world is turning, people are getting up to all sorts because of and despite the capriciousness of fate.

I particularly like the concluding lines'for the last time I watch the clods crumble and topple over after the ploughshare and the stumbling team.

I'm not so sure that the fallen elm and stumbling team are a metaphor for fallen soldiers as is often supposed.



Thomas has a delicious eye for the world around him and there are murmurings of the idea that we are not quite equal to the beauty we observe in this poem, picked up later in The Glory'. and othe poems in the vein of 'Adlestrop.' It is this reluctance and pessimism tinged with beauty that Thomas finds, like a pulse.

Slumber 01.11.2010.

His head bows

then lifts,

then bows again.

Lifts, bows,

then lifts again.

His folded arms

hold him at bay.

Whisked, whole,

to Salford,

his dream fizzes away.

Rice bowl haiku 01.11.2010.

A particular
grain of rice is displaced. The
next dislodges it.

Particle 01.11.2010.

A particle.


A particle shifts.

Another one rushes in

swiftly, takes its place.